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mar0364 -> Will you respect me in the morning? (6/5/2002 19:56:32)

OK have it.

http://www.richmariner.net/

Be kind! Really its my first time.

Thanks!
Rich




garry -> RE: Will you respect me in the morning? (6/5/2002 20:28:24)

Hi Richard

Nice layout !
I would take another photo (a nice clear one)!
Get your meta tags on the site.
But most importantly......content. You need a few more "keywords" on the home page (all pages) so it will be picked up through all the other sites out there. You mention website 3 times & design twice/designing once and that is about it in regards to what you do(I do, we all seem to do), What other words does the average person use in your region use to search for webpage creators?



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mar0364 -> RE: Will you respect me in the morning? (6/5/2002 20:54:47)

Thanks. I added the meta stuff. Pic sucks. I'm will take another.

My coworker said I looked like the actor Micky Rook in the movie "Bar Fly".




JedMan -> RE: Will you respect me in the morning? (6/5/2002 21:30:14)

Hi Richard,

The site looks pretty good. Previous comments + the contact us page looks a little bare. You may want to modify your form layout so it's not so... empty.

When viewing your portfolio i notied you like to use white backrounds. I find white backgrounds hard on the eyes. but maybe that's just me :) Looks good though overall i'd give it a 7 out of 10

JedMan



Paula -> RE: Will you respect me in the morning? (6/5/2002 22:21:35)

Hi Rich,
Good job on the site. A couple of nit-picky things I see:
On the Home page:
"We are a small business that believe in giving high quality service to a small number of clients... "
The first sentence is gramatically incorrect. First, it would need to be "believes" rather than "believe" but the sentence doesn't work because a business is inanimate and by definition can't believe. You could say:
"We are small business practitioners who believe..." or "web designers who believe..." Hope that made sense.
On the About Us page:
1st para, 1st sentence "experience in developing website ." left out the "s"
Same para, I think "hands on" should be "hands-on" but I'm not sure about that.
Last para,
"Both you and I want your for profit or not for profit organization or business represented with the kind of quality and caring the we produce."
I think I would put quotation marks around "for profit" and "not for profit".
It took me a couple of times reading that sentence before I got it.
The last thing is on the contact page and I hesitate to mention it, least I be accused of being overly sensitive, but...
"Relativity
If you place your hand on a hot oven for a minute it seems like an hour. If you talk to a beautiful women for an hour it seems like a minute."
I think this is a bit unprofessional for a business page. You will find a lot of female business owners these days and as one myself, I totally can't relate to this example of relativity. Just my opinion.
All and all I think you did a great job, best wishes with your business.





Paula
The more I learn the less I seem to know.



PBailey -> RE: Will you respect me in the morning? (6/6/2002 3:11:45)

Rich,
The look is nice but I am going to add to the other Paula's grammer suggestions. On the the home page:

quote:
When you become our customer. You will know what it means to be a valued client.


When you become our customer is not a complete sentence

quote:
As technology leaps from great to WOW!.

Again, not a complete sentence and you don't need a period after an exclamation mark.

quote:
these concepts don't go away. I would say they become more important.


You might try just saying "They become more important" It forms a definite statement rather then a vague "maybe" kind of statement.

On the portfolio page
quote:
everything that we do. But we felt

either take out the period that breaks the sentences or start a new sentence with "We"
quote:
So please call them and ask what they think of us.


Drop the "so" and start the sentence with "Please"

Sorry to be so picky on this but sometimes grammer can make or break a deal.

Congratulations on your new certification!



 Paula
So much to learn......



piquet -> RE: Will you respect me in the morning? (6/6/2002 12:19:16)

The layout looks very professional but I would agree with the previous comments about grammar. I am biased though, I am an English teacher! If you want to do business with companies then you have to aim for the utmost professionalism.
Regarding the comment about white backgrounds, I love them! I think they are the most suitable for serious commercial websites.

Look after #1 and donīt step in #2.



mar0364 -> RE: Will you respect me in the morning? (6/6/2002 12:25:02)

When I get home tonight I am going to put all of these fine suggestions to work. I thank you all for giving me your time.






Charles W Davis -> RE: Will you respect me in the morning? (6/6/2002 18:14:42)

Richard,

For starters! A great look! It is consistent in Opera 6.0, NN 6.2 and IE 6!

On your home page, the 4th bullet that reads:
quote:
At Fair Price.
should read
quote:
A Fair Price.


On your About Us page, second paragraph, that which reads:
quote:
of class room and project hours
Should read:
quote:
of classroom and project hours


I like the white background on your site and all of those in the portfolio.


Enjoy! It's your endeavor!
Chuck, the male ladybug. http://www.anthemwebs.com
http://www.moderncabinetmaking.com

Edited by - Charles W Davis on 06/06/2002 18:18:11



mar0364 -> RE: Will you respect me in the morning? (6/8/2002 9:34:46)

Well I took what everyone had to say into consideration and made some positive changes. So take another look.
http://www.richmariner.net
Like everything on the web it is a work in progress.

Thanks!
Rich




Paula -> RE: Will you respect me in the morning? (6/8/2002 14:44:45)

Hi Rich,
Great new picture! I think the changes made a big difference. It looks really good to me!

Paula
The more I learn the less I seem to know.



PBailey -> RE: Will you respect me in the morning? (6/8/2002 15:56:17)

Hi Rich,
Much improved. Good luck on your new business.

 Paula
So much to learn......



Charles W Davis -> RE: Will you respect me in the morning? (6/8/2002 23:18:37)

mar0364.

Some nit pickin' follows.

On your Contact page, the email address should be a link.

Also the file name should be changed from
quote:
.richmariner.net/new_page_5.htm
to contact.htm

Also, the page title seems like search engine spam:
quote:
<title>Contact >> Rich Mariner, Richard Mariner, Richard Ford Mariner</title>


Nifty site!

Enjoy! It's your endeavor!
Chuck, the male ladybug. http://www.anthemwebs.com
http://www.moderncabinetmaking.com



mar0364 -> RE: Will you respect me in the morning? (6/9/2002 10:16:09)

Thanks everyone. The only way we get better is by creative input from a educated group of people.

Rich Mariner




Charles W Davis -> RE: Will you respect me in the morning? (6/9/2002 21:56:29)

Rich,

I overlooked the lack of a copyright statement. Such a beautiful site should put folks on notice!

Too many people think if its on the web, it's fair game.

Enjoy! It's your endeavor!
Chuck, the male ladybug. http://www.anthemwebs.com
http://www.moderncabinetmaking.com



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