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One more site to critique for me - 10/13/2002 15:58:47
I really like what you guys said about Puriartha.com (the one i post yesterday)
Today I want to get suggestion/comments about the design for my site :
http://www.adwis.net
what do you guys think ?
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RE: One more site to critique for me - 10/13/2002 16:21:22
a VERY good looking site - very clean - easy to navigate (apart maybe from the gallery).
I viewed in IE6, 800x600 and had a half inch scroll bar. Would look 1st class without the scroll
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RE: One more site to critique for me - 10/13/2002 17:03:48
Hmmm,
I got a blank page saying to " Click here to go to www.adwis.net" - I did and got a 404 error????
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Peppergal
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RE: One more site to critique for me - 10/13/2002 22:48:51
Very nice looking site. However, I noticed several typos and grammar errors:
" every design have it own purpose" from the " Zero" Image (which is cool looking BTW)
SHOULD BE
" every design has its own purpose"
" Adwis.net provide one stop service for all your company needs. Start from your company logo design, website, print design and your webhosting solutions."
SHOULD BE
" Adwis.net provides one stop service for all your company needs, starting with company logo design, website development, print design, and finishing with webhosting solutions."
OR
We start with logo design, website development (etc)... We finish by offering webhosting solutions.OR something like that....
" Redesign project for PantheonIT a growing Internet development and computer networking company is near done"
SHOULD BE " near completion" or " nearly done"
" Bellevue Community College, need poster"
SHOULD BE " needs poster"
From the " Jobs" page for Pantheon IT
" He or she will be required to design, develop, and implement projects on multiple platforms, utilizing a diverse collectif technologies"
SHOULD BE " Collective technologies"
There may be more, but I' m not going to hunt for them (unless you wanna pay me, ha ha! ) But I' m sure you get the general idea. I snort when I read material put out by people that are full of these kinds of errors. I wouldn' t trust someone to do a great job for me if he/she publishes typos. Now, I' ve been blasted for this hang up of mine by other people in the past..." oh, it' s just a mistake...nobody' s perfect..." blah blah blah. BUT the point is...if someone doesn' t correct a simple typo, how am I to know that they' ll see and correct bigger problems?
I' m not saying this to be mean, I hope I haven' t hurt your feelings. I don' t mean to, and honestly, your site is very impressive otherwise. This is a pet peeve of mine, and I see it ALL over the place..on the web, on signs advertising businesses...one of my favorites is " Edith' s....Hair Stylist" Well, who the heck is Edith, and why do I care that this is her hair stylist? It should say " Edith' s Hair Salon" or " Edith the Hair Stylist" or something. Menus that offer desert instead of dessert...what, is the cake overbaked and dry? Other things I hate is to see the letter " N" made backwards...and I also see the " &" made backwards too. If someone is dyslexic they should NOT be in the sign making business!
Sorry for the rant. Phew...all done now.[:p]
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Adwis
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RE: One more site to critique for me - 10/14/2002 8:49:49
that the problem im not a copywriter :(
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RE: One more site to critique for me - 10/14/2002 8:51:59
Peppergal, can I use all your correction for my site ?
I will call you if I need to make a website, so you can do the copywrite thing (I' m glad to pay for that)
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RE: One more site to critique for me - 10/14/2002 9:04:05
Adwis,
I echo the concern already expressed about your use of small font sizes. Notwithstanding this concern, your sites are just beautiful!!! In my opinion, your integration of Flash in this site is one of the best I' ve seen...subtle, not annoying, very tasteful. Fabulous use of colors. You are very talented.
The point about spelling and grammatical errors is well taken. I' ve looked at your resume and presume that English is not your native language. If I am correct, I commend you for your efforts to write in a language that is neither your own nor an easy one. But it is vital that spelling and grammar are correct for this type of project. Fixing it should be a priority!
If you can not find some one to proof and edit your copy, I will be glad to do so until you find someone in your area who can. I have writing and editorial experience.
If you wish to take me up on my offer, please email me directly and we' ll go from there.
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RE: One more site to critique for me - 10/14/2002 9:17:31
Adwis and I apparently posted almost simultaneously. I want to make clear that my offer to help him was not meant to interfere with any business relationship that may be established here.
gail
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RE: One more site to critique for me - 10/14/2002 10:33:56
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I want to make clear that my offer to help him was not meant to interfere with any business relationship that may be established here.
gali, you' re sweet. [:-)]
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RE: One more site to critique for me - 10/14/2002 11:05:58
Peppergal,
I' ve been involved in these forums for almost two years now and have found that the spirit of Outfront is freely sharing of information and offering assitance when one can. I remain simply amazed at the depth and quality of help I' ve received. Though my areas of expertise are limited compared to what others can offer, I am glad to help if and in whatever way I can.
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RE: One more site to critique for me - 10/14/2002 12:05:09
I would offer assistance, except I still get a blank page.
Maybe that needs to be addressed first?
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RE: One more site to critique for me - 10/14/2002 17:50:41
Thanks especially for _gail and peppergal for your help.
I definitely will contact one of you if I get another project in the future.
maybe we can work together.
and it' s true that English is not my first language. :)
right now I' m in seattle.
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RE: One more site to critique for me - 10/14/2002 23:25:35
Adwis,
With all the comments above, I' ll simply add that the site rendered well in IE6, NN 7, NN 4.76 and Opera 6.
Wonder what happened on the puriartha site?
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RE: One more site to critique for me - 10/15/2002 1:07:07
Gil, I know I got a prompt for allowing an Active-X control; could that be why you' re not seeing it? I don' t know... I may be showing my ignorance more here [:p] I wish there was an embarrassed emoticon
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RE: One more site to critique for me - 10/15/2002 7:44:57
No, I never see a ActiveX download attempt ( I would not say OK, if I did!).
I am getting the <noframes> content [using Opera w/ frames off], but the link points right back to the framed site.
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_gail
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RE: One more site to critique for me - 10/16/2002 21:51:28
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ORIGINAL: adwis
Thanks especially for _gail and peppergal for your help.
I definitely will contact one of you if I get another project in the future.
maybe we can work together.
and it' s true that English is not my first language. :)
right now I' m in seattle.
adwis,
Please make sure your current projects, the ones you' ve asked for reviews, are corrected grammatically. Per my email, my offer to assist still stands.
gail
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RE: One more site to critique for me - 10/18/2002 5:06:55
yupe.. thanks gail.
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